Thanks for the welcomes, I've actually been with JPF for a while, but don't post that often (Almost a year since I posted a lyric or critiqued one). I'm hoping to be more active from now on. There are a lot of great people here who are friendly and helpful.

Calvin: Changing 'her' to 'you' in the 1st verse, second line sounds good. Keeps it more personal. Thanks.

Dayson: I'll have to play it a few times with the verses switched to see how it feels. Thanks for the suggestion.

Diane: Glad you like the hook. I like 'begged you..'. I didn't notice that I used 'let __ go' in both verses. Looking at it now I realize that I also used 'feel/feeling(s)' too much. Once in the 1st verse, 3x in the second and in the bridge, too. I think the last line of the 2nd verse is kind of weak, so I'll probably change that and see if it helps. Thanks.

John: You're right. The choruses would have to move with the verses to make it work if I decide to switch them. I'll play with it. I'm not sure 'superhuman' or 'each and every' would work in the 2nd verse with my melody, but I think replacing 'each' with 'every' might give the line a little more impact. Thanks.

Joice: It's almost unanimous. I'll play around with switching the verses and see how it affects the choruses. Thanks.

I'll go back and edit the lyric post with some of the changes now, and then I'll look into switching the verses.

Thanks,
Todd

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