Lyle:

1. Awesome intro. I like the way it gathers momentum.
2. Melody of the third line of the verse is partcularly strong.
3. "Eldorado bring me faster, bring me freedom, When the loneliness cuts into me like fire" is the killer part of the song but it is over WAY too soon.
4. Overall, this is a unique, wild creative ride.

I was surprised that you didn't really feature the "Eldorado bring me faster, bring me freedom..." lines by repeating that melody and turning it into a full fledged chorus. I think that's a great hook.

Loved it.

Mark


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