Hi Mark. This is pretty good production. It is floydish....yet has its own appeal. The subject matter works as does the feel. The quiet controlled vocals work well, moody with the haunting guitar. My only gripes are no real hook either melodically or lyrically and no rise. Nice of you to put up a tab. Very helful. I kept waiting for the rise, change of tempo or direction. Bit of an anti climax when it did not materialise.
It sort of promised much after the interesting first verse but then just meanders without taking us anywhere new. too many Cs perhaps....?