Hi Greg, Mark, and Janice,

The music and singing is just beautiful.

All the words are very evocative, each verse a gem.

The only nit I have is that the singer's daughter might bless grandpa, since he becomes the focus of the song. Otherwise, it feels the first chorus is just there to let us know that you will be playing off of it, in changing choruses two and three.

But then a stroke of genius: you bookend the original chorus idea with actual children singing at the end, and though these bookends feel a little unrelated to the sad portrait of an alcoholic which is the "books" ... there is a sense of understanding and forgiveness and compassion in the innocent words and voices of children that connects the two song parts and gives the song, and grandpa's unfortunate life, a sense of meaning.

MIke

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 07/14/09 09:21 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)