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HI Magne

Yes throw an occasional curve ball. gets them off the scent a bit

I wrote a pop song a ways back and it was about a person not being able to see themselves as OUT of the relationship. Ya know "can't handle the hurt" or the other person moving on.

And they sing

I don't see it in a photograph
Can't picture me under the broken glass
Someday somebody's gonna take my place
A different face in a heart shape frame

Okay you expect - Place to fall in place and rhyme with face

I got sooo much more out of that because I forced myself to not use the obvious rhyme. Now I got more imagery and support for my feelings and message.

And it sings like a bird - Perfectly!

I remember a few years back the A&R guy who produces & did Kelly Clarkson's first hit record tried to give me a tiny bit of insight on lyrics.

Only it helps more if before you open your mouth you read the lyrics to your own songs or the ones your paying money to.

"It was all pretend,we started out a s friends. back at school everything was cool"

He went on to say how the song had to be new and fresh, just like this one right?

Man I wish I had thought of that

And you're like "well she's a kid so I guess it's acceptable, then you find out that two grown men wrote it not her.

Listen you don't accept that lyric then try to to BS somebody afterwards lol....
There is nothing new & fresh about it or her.

But that's what the music biz is all about - Your suck, sucks. Our suck doesn't suck!" lol