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That's a great rhyme, as in "my heart was thinkin' Hallmark/but the words came out all Wallmart"

If we find we are re-arranging furniture to accommodate a rhyme, any rhyme, a listener might very well stumble over the furniture. Good writers can slip an obvious rhyme in, in such an unobvious way, that you don't notice.

If we don't have a grasp over "what we are trying to say" in a song, it is easy to fall into the trap of searching for rhymes first, and then shifting the meaning of our song around to accompany the rhyme. In most cases, I would say this is not a healthy practice. Best to know exactly what we want to say, then often times the perfect language will be there to help us say it. Of course, if the perfect language for what we want to say is full of cliches, then maybe our song idea is a cliche, and doesn't need to be written.

Mike