Originally Posted by John M Parker
Many of the contributors to this thread seem to throw all proper rhymes into the "obvious rhyme" category, which was bothering me. I think that you can use proper rhymes as long as they're not trite.

(*The book title is actually one word, but it keeps getting edited out as a naughty word, though I don't know why.)


The reason the thing with the book title happens is it's the name of another songwriting web forum. .net is the extension.

On the rhyme thing, I posted something about proper rhymes in here that I later deleted or never got posted right or something but it went along with what you said. They can be proper without being trite.

Two examples--Chesney's hit "How Forever Feels" starts with
"Big orange ball....sinking in the water....
something something something....couldn't get much hotter."

I think that's a proper rhyme and it blew me away. Another one is in Sugarland's "Gotta Be More Than This."

There's gotta be somethin more
Gotta be more than THIS
I need a little less hard time
I need a little more BLISS

The word "this" is pretty trite but the word "bliss" is quite unique.

Later on in the song there are these lines
"Armagedon could be knockin at my door
But I ain't gonna answer that's for sure"

I know "sure" and "pure" aren't proper rhymes but I thought those lines made up for it.