I liked you're original first verse. It worked for me. I wrote this down a couple days ago, but thought these fine folks fixed you up, but now that I'm reading, I'll go ahead and post it, you may be able to piece it with something else here.

v2
if all the good ones are taken
how is the sea still full
i see them everywhere but they never stop
maybe i'm just a fool
but i have to believe she'll come along
and like a siren, i'll get lost in her song


OK, I know, it was just a minute of my time, so it's not exactly good, but it's something. maybe even useable. lmk

Caroline


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