Originally Posted by Gary E. Andrews
The lyric seems too generically philosophical. The singer-character is talking about 'you' throughout, never an 'I' to interact with the 'you' or to be the one with all these feelings. I wonder if the lyric could be re-written to make it a first-person statement of a point of view. It's hard to stay with line after line of philosophy without a concrete reality to apply them to. I only listened twice but didn't get that sense of somebody in the song. The 'you' came across as the collective you, saying any listener is experiencing these feelings, in my opinion, not the singer-character or any other specific person. I just wonder if the lyric could be tweaked to strengthen the sense of story, rather than abstract or general philosophy.


Thanks Gary for the critique but as for this song, I can't do anything about changing it either musically or lyrically as it is not my song. I just did the demo you heard.

Stevie

I'm the only person here who is not unique.