I like the harmony parts. Your practice is paying off.

I've been doing a lot of open mics lately. Like, thurs-sun. I only do one coffee house through that and I don't stick around too long cuz I have 2 make it 2 another show fairly quick to sign up. But, this is a kin to what's going on there. And it's a college coffee house, if that means anything to you.

The thing with the music on this one was that I liked it because that's how you heard it and I like your style. So for me, I don't even hear it another way. Maybe switch over to strumming for the chorus? But I wouldn't label that as an improvement.

Recently, a JPF member asked if he could use one of my tunes. I said fine by me and he sent me a copy of what he heard with my lyrics. EYE OPENING. Maybe you could try for something like that? It gave me a bunch of cool ideas and I still listen to it because it's good. Tho, I think if you'd have hard feelings about someone 'messing' with your songs, it wouldn't be beneficial. That's all I got.

I really like it, but if you think it's lacking, you heard more.

I have music for all of my songs and they vary from rock to country to folk and everywhere in between. (except rap)