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by Gary E. Andrews - 10/19/26 10:48 PM
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Hi Kevin,
Hey Yeah! Good one. I don't mind the hey yea but I'd change the title to Free Fall or Life's Free Fall just because the other is sort of generic. Just a couple things I noticed:
"drive in for scotch, park"
I think you could drop the park without losing anything and it's confusing.
"brokenness can still be repaired"
Maybe it's your phrasing/timing but this line sounded awkward. You could drop the "still" if you needed fewer syllables.
Overall, this is a keeper. Tempo is good and the music was really well done and suited the lyrics. It shows a ray of hope as well, which everyone loves.
Ricki
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