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Hey Ian and Nelson:

Hope you guys don't mind that I address your points in the same post - you both have some good ones.

I put this together with the exact approach that Nelson described - really I had in mind that the first three verses would be completely unrelated with the only common basis being that they were all cool (to me).

But Ian has a point - the first two are probably a little too similar in outlook - leading the listener to look for a pattern only to have it blown up in verse 3. Actually, I don't want it to be blown up until verse 4.

So there are two ways to go here and Ian has already outlined them. Make verse 3 fit with 1 and 2. Or change one of the first two verses so that all three verses are, for lack of a better word, perpendicular to each other.

So that the song still hits with the intended impact, I probably favor the second approach. However, I might just put everything on the table - I'm still thinking of having the first three verses be things that are more subtle or not as far out there - as the desire to write a more classic song is always present.

But it still has to be cool - so a pretty big challenge there.

I'll just have to give it some more thought

Thanks so much for sharing all your thoughts guys. No Ian, I'd never be mad at you or anyone for making suggestions or not thinking it's done. If I ever post a song I'm sure is done, I indicate that I'm just sharing and no comments are needed.

Appreciate it guys

Scott