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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Good call, Fran. I was hoping you'd get rid of it.  Donna Hi Donna, do you think this would work?? I would appreciate any suggestions, from you and other songwriters for this verse. Thanks.. V1) Called, and said she loved me That she was on her- way home It was the last time- we'd talk Before everything went- wrong PS, I know this can be a good lyric when finished. Speak soon, Fran Williams Fran, one possibility might be: She called to say she loved me Just before she left for home It was the last time we'd talk Before everything went wrong This implies either that she phoned before getting into the car, or that at least she wasn't on a cell phone when the accident happened. I realise there are 2 x 'before' in the verse, but I think the repetition serves to contrast the difference in the nature of the events. I feel 'called to say' is more poignant and dramatic than 'called and said'. Anyway, just a thought.  Others will no doubt chime in. Just thought of another possibility. She called to say she loved me And was leaving soon for home It was the last time we'd talk Before everything went wrong Donna
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