Originally Posted by Ricky Layne
Beautiful song. Very genuine in lyrics and delivery.

I think you have an opportunity to add to the emotional delivery in a few places. Your melodies are very good but become a little stagnant to me at the end of each verse. It would be a great place to go up in vocal pitch even if it's just on the last couple words imo. Would make great lead ins to each verse and also the chorus.

That's all I can really pick out as something I would consider changing.

Very nice song!


Thanks, Ricky, for the listen and comment. Most appreciated

Steve

Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald