Hi Ken,

I like most of the imagery. I too believe it's going to be a little long. I think if you do it as below, it builds into a better song. The verse I placed last is a very strong one. Something you want to go into your last chorus from. I really do like this one. I'd like to hear it when it's all done. It's a great tribute to your wife.

Firefly Rose Copyright 2007 Ken Randall

Stella was the quickest, could catch em everytime
And bruce was the shepherd,he could see into the night
I was the watcher, always gettin hypnotized
By the flicker of the firefly thats been masonized

When the dawn fell upon the farmhouse window frame
Mama would be gatherin the captives of our game
She'd place them in her hand, and with the softest breath
Send em off into the breeze,with gentle wings refreshed

She'd kiss me on the cheek,Knowing how the times do change
As I sprouted to a man, how the tables would rearrange
Cause.....

Everyone needs their Firefly to bring them in from the storm
Everyone needs their Firefly in the dark to keep them warm
With the sparkle of natural beauty on the petals of her soul
Yes I've found my Firefly ,and her name is Rose
Oh I've been captured by a Firefly, My glistening Rose

Yeah, I know a heart can burn, at times can chill in sorrow
But since our spirits touched, I can only see tommorow
For in the place she holds me, the light gathers strong
And in her eyes of autumn lies the risin of the sun

There's one for all of us,with it's heart beating on
Waitin for the moment to gather up your gypsy song
Turn the table,place your wings into their open hand
And let their gentle breath end the search within
Cause....

Everyone needs their Firefly to bring them in from the storm
Everyone needs their Firefly in the dark to keep them warm
With the sparkle of natural beauty on the petals of her soul
Yes I,ve found My Firefly, and her name is Rose
Oh, I've been captured by a Firefly, my glistening Rose

All rights reserved 2007 Ken Randall

Have a goodun,

John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter
A day without learning is a day lost forever.

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