Just me and the acoustic, doubled vocals, Before I get too far into this song, I'd like some feedback on the structure of it, that way I can make some of the changes early... Thanx!!

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I'm movin,
But life is movin too fast.
I'm tryin.
To stay in the green grass.

So don't miss,
Understand,
the words I
feed you from my

hand, they're meant for you.

And don't try,
To make this,
More than it
seems that it is,

these words they're meant for you.

I'll lay here,
Wait for the winter snow to fall.
And hope that,
This summer was worth it all.

I'm tryin to keep my head above water.
I'm just trying to get air.
I'm hoping that life is gonna be better.
Come and save me from dispair