Thanks for your time! I'll be sure to try out the lyric changes you made. I was running through it in my head and it didn't seem to flow quite right, but I'll check it out while playing just to make sure, I'm sure that there will be a section that sounds better they way you put it.

As far as the recording goes, it was just a simple run through to get the melody and stuff out there for people to hear. I promise, I won't overproduce it when I go to actually record it. It just helps getting your lyric changes and stuff before I've already put 2-3 solid days into working on a recording, just to go back and have to change a bunch of stuff :-)

Thank you for your feed back. I am considering doing two versions of this, an electric and an acoustic, I tried it with the electric and it sounds pretty bad ass, but takes away the emotion that the acoustic added to it, so I'm going to do it acoustic no matter what, but I think that it deserves an electric version as well.

Again thank you so much for taking the time to help me out!
-brad