Jim,

First, I really enjoyed your song, from beginning to end. I like the layering on the mix when you pop the listener with the chorus. And the repetition of that sequence keeps the song moving forward throughout.

And the concept of the lyric is interesting and very creative. I do think the vocal could be brought forward just a little more so it isn't swallowed by the music at times.

Very good song that I truly enjoyed listening to. Good luck with this and your CD project.

Alan