HiDee Again, Mz Gale!

Spoo-Kay...yet a fine Love Story, if ever there was!

What Gary Said...ya needs to condense-a-bit...say The Same Thing in Less Words.

V1 Sug f'rinatance:
Each Friday, out my window, I glimpse Mr Jones
All Dressed-Up for Dinner, he sits..eats it alone
Stacks-Up the 45's..on..his old phonograph
"Howcome all the Music?" my nextdoor neighbor asked

'Said his Mrs passed last winter, cold November day
Except for Friday nights, the ol' guy seems O.K.
That was their night-together, He'd take her in his arms
Now he plays Waltz-after-Waltz, but..it don't do no harm

(77 Words..vs..96 as-penned.

V3, the "her" is uncertain who Her Is...so I'd recommend sheddin' some words & just say "I used to watch them..had to take the chance"

Overall, Fine Plotline...Good Writing..keep at it..& Good Luck!

Big Hugs,
Stan

Last edited by "TampaStan" Good; 03/22/09 10:32 PM.