Hi Ricki,

I think you spent more than half an hour writing your song, lol!

Maybe my reading of V2 is over-influenced by Cinema; but in well made movies, nothing is there accidentally. Every scene, every word, has a purpose in pushing along the narrative.

And so your first verse is spent setting up a scene where the singer sees her own reflected "face" during a storm, and like it's "another person". Then, the very first line of the second verse is "I could tell by the look on your face". So, thinking that "everything is written the way it it for a reason, with purpose", I easily thought that the singer was either talking to her reflection or to herself. The way you have set up that transition makes my reading a natural one!

I'm doing no such serious thing as "critiquing" this particular lyric; I consider you an "artist" and so try to steer away from "craft talk"...just sharing with you, my impressions of what your writing says to me, and by no means am I asking you to reveal any secrets behind the words. Quite the opposite, actually. The lyric loses much, it's universality for one, if one knows the personal details driving the words smile

Best wishes,

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 04/11/09 07:50 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)