Thanks Beth... I actually THOUGHT I had made it clear that I actually threw Penelope in the fountain in the final chorus... but would this sell it better? (even though it's a further departure from the original chorus?)


I threw my Penny in the fountain
And then got outta there
I know that she can't swim
But I don't even care
I yearned to share my soul
But Penny ripped my insides out
So I threw my Penny in the fountain
And I sure hope she drowned

And a big 'roger' on the condensing... I knew it would be necessary but if I don't post them when I'm done, then I set 'em aside and forget about them (usually). But if I post them then I get reminded of them whenever someone comments and I get to make sure it gets further work... There's always lotsa warts on my first drafts... Anyway this one is gonna have to boil a while so the sauce will thicken. smirk

Greg