Hi Kevin. Sorry I've come in a bit late on this one.
I hope you don’t mind me offering my 2 cents worth.

I did think straight away that the first line is a bit lacking.. Maybe blunt with a touch of yoda.

Also not sure how the Dalmatian fits with fire truck and bells.

Back long ago… two of the words sort of say the same thing.

all IMO Kevin...

So. KOS

So long ago,
I remember those Christmas seasons
my dad always SAID that
things happen for GOOD reasons

One TIME I prayed and hoped,
besides a GI Joe,
I COULD SEE my heart's desire
In that toy store window

I said "God, I know you're near
please tell Santa I’VE BEEN good this year,
Can you ask him JUST for me please...

(chorus)
bring me that red fire truck
with FIRE STATION , TOY bells
PLASTIC ladders and a siren.
GOD you'll never hear me crying
if you do this for me
you'll have no regrets
cause I WONT ASK FOR anything else

(verse)
THEN Dad got laid off in November
HAD LOTS OF BILLS COMING IN December
Mama cried, AS Dad said, don’t worry, it’s time for gifts
SPENT TIME AT joe’s OLD Junkyard
Scrounging FOUR wheels and truck parts
Spent the week TOGETHER fixing,
Painting, making it look sleek

(lift)
While I sanded, my daddy hummed
OUR favorite Christmas tune
While in my mind the lyrics went

Last edited by Roy Cooper; 12/08/10 07:58 AM.
'You Have To Kiss A Lot Of Frogs To Find A Prince'