Few questions:
1.) Are the drums too much? I can sample other drum parts
maybe too loud but not over the top with fills
2.) Think of changing line 1 to "Many years ago" -- better or not much of a difference.
I'd rather see a year here...back in '88....
3.) How's the mix?
other than the drums too loud...decent
4.) Does the lead vocal need to lowered slightly? (I thought I adjusted it, but it still sounds loud).
I didn't notice it so ok there...


Kevin, I think my main nit with this is that it didn't grab me emotionally. I couldn't empathize with a kid wanting something that bad. There needs to be an emotional connection there. I know you come in with the dad being laid off but I would have rather had the kid wanting it for someone else--some kind of twist that ties it all together. All from the eyes of a kid....who wouldn't be heart-tugged with a kid doing everything he can to get a truck for a sick friend or a kid that has no dad, etc? Just my 2...

Zeek