Hi Kevin. This is a nice story and the song has a nice catchy melody that stays with you. A few tweaks and I think it will be fine.

Here are a couple of ideas for tweaking lyrics that you may consider or trash: On the end of the chorus where your fixing and painting the truck to make sleek--that line seems a bit awkward for me. I think you should mention the truck, since you are talking about fixing it up. Without going into as much detail, you could say it like this:

"We spent the week try'n to make that truck look sleek."

Also if you add the word "As" before Mama cried, it will make what Dad said relate better to "Mama cried." A tiny change, but better flow in my opinion.

I like the tone of your voice, we all want to re-do lines, but a little gravel or crackling is sometimes a more interesting voice, and you may want to even use it with certain songs.

The mix sounds pretty balanced to me, I prefer the drums (at least kick & snare) up 1 dec and your lead vocal down 1 dec as I heard it through my headphones. Once I get the vocals where I'm satisfied, I'll go back and automate any areas where I may be vocally too weak or strong--that could be the case here.

Good luck with it, nice job thus far!

steady-eddie.

Last edited by E Swartz; 12/05/12 11:30 PM.