Originally Posted by John Voorpostel
Love the hook Dom but in execution you do betray the fact you are not married

IMO your examples do a disservice to that excellent hook...the very first reaction by Elvis showed you that

Maybe rewrite on the basis of dumb but intimate things...you ate the cake she baked for her mom....one suggestion

Anyway, stellar hook...

Not sure what means John, i cant write this title if im not married?

Is David Bowie an astronaut?