Hi Bobbie,

I did see the questioning about snap's workability
but it seemed to me that you were reluctant to let it go — at least at the outset.
As you know (I think) I always do all I can to make someone's choice of imagey work— even if
I'm thinkin', "if it was me I'd take a new tack".

Dylan sang:
"God knows it could SNAP apart right now
Just like puttin' scissors to a string"

Here I know that your meaning will change from the snap being the duration of our stay but try this — I've used "linger" to soften the approach:

We linger a short while,
enduring sadness sharing smiles
In a finger snap. . . It's time to go.

A'course there's always old faithful
where "linger" still helps with internal rhyme:

In the wink of an eye, it's time to go.


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Terry

[This message has been edited by Tall_Terry (edited 03-26-2003).]