HiDee Brother Ken!

First off, a Critique on Structure, Amigo:

SIX verses. Three Choruses. One Climb...This Baby's gonna run LONG unless ya Prune it Down a bit, methinks. Methinks Wrong, occasionally, but that's My Initial Impression.

Secondarily, this is HEAVY on the Po-e-sie...weak on the "Conversational Quality"...tho that's JMO too. "Eyes of Autumn" comes to mind...nobody really Talks Like That...(& are ya sayin' She's OLD?) The "Sea of Life" Verse was maybe TOO fulla Poetic Imagery for this addlepated reader.

There's maybe maybe One Too Many Images goin' ON here:
Firstly, the Firefly-in-a-Jar..which works decently at first.

Then ya plunge us into a Storm/tell us we all need that Firefly in a Jar to make it thru (that STORM...) yet "Firefly" doesn't feel like the Candlepower of a BEACON..exactly..so THAT Image fell a bit Short...at least..for skeptical ol' moi.

Perhaps if ya'd stayed within' the Parameters of a Lonely Summer Night this WOULD Work Well.. Technically, Fireflies DON'T exude any HEAT at all from their Chemically-Created Light (Lucifrase + Oxygen = Cold Light) so the "keep them warm" line kinda also falls flat.

That's what Bugs Me here...tho the Chick's WILL Dig this Nice & Over-romantic Effort..You Watch!

Good Luck with it, Amigo!
Big Guy-p\Hug,
Stan