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I'm going to pipe in too.
I really like the hook here. I do think the verses need to be tightened up, it doesn't seem to sing as well as it could (but neither do I) The chorus could use some clever touches too as well as the br. Example.....
Ch. (your original) And suddenly love was on the line my heart skipped a beat in time We'd come so far we couldn't turn back Because love was on the line
Ch. (?) Suddenly love was on the line Downloading emotions had taken their own time No turning back, or turning off Our souls had intertwined Too much at stake now, Love is on the line
Br. (your original) Our hearts made a connection I'm praying that nothing will break No one understands how it could happen But I'm hoping it was worth the wait
Br. (?) There's a connection between our hearts I pray won't fail Started in a chat room but quickly progressed to e-mail
Just my two cents,
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