Didn't do it for me Sharon.
It adds another set of similes with the steel and fire thing.
First line has ten sillybillies against the original seven so I think it blows the tune some.
Subsiquent lines also don't tally close enough to keep the chorus tune.
Trying to fit too many catch lines in a song often makes it just too busy.
I really think you gotta stick woth the sewing basket approach Sharon.
Rgards.
Graham

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