Michele,

Hard to believe it your first song, very well done. At first I thought this was the song you sang at your wedding -- and it didn't quite strike me as a wedding day song at all (LOL!).

OK moving on -- I think it has an extremely catchy hook which makes it a great listen and makes it potentially marketable.

I don't see where the "I found a man, he's here today..." verse fits in at all to the theme that you have set up. Maybe that's a bridge type thing where you go a different direction or just re-write it. (Just my opinion, of course)

If you keep writing 'em like this -- watch out world!

Kevin


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