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Hi Janice and Greg,

It's funny, just on the heels of telling Stan about a depressing article I read yesterday on the incredible number of marriages with a bunch of years under their belts falling part, I read THIS lyric... and it makes me feel better too!

BUT, that article aside, this has a nice homespun feel to it, and the advice doesn't come across as too hokey. I love the Dancing In The Rain -- metaphorically and literally.... and it's nice to think of neighbors being so open and genuine with each other.

Couple of favorite lines:

Forever dries a lot of tears

But as the lights went out, the anger left our hearts
When the morning came again, we’d get another start

I think you could probably tighten it up a bit in parts, and I'm not so sure about the imagery in the second verse. How about something like:

They always saw us hand in hand
Hoped we'd help them understand
How to brave the storms of life
And rise above the noise and strife

Those might be a little cliche....but reading over some of the other posts, it appears you're tackling those lines already.

All in all, a very nice sentimental piece.

I look forward to hearing it with musication!

Beth