Originally Posted by Bill Draper
I am really enjoying this thread! I took a shot at a song from some random scribbles in my note book. Here is:

https://www.udio.com/songs/wXQXiwoQcYfCUbyky632yA

I think the singer's phrasing, being that it's conforming to your lyric, is creating a more interesting form than, say, the consistent iambic pentameter of a Wordsworth poem, which leads to boxy structures. This has surprises in it. I hope you'll finish it with (at least) another section after what's there, and then maybe an intro and outro.

I hear some Dylan in her phrasing. Reminds me a little of Aimee Mann.

Wistful, quirky, and quite stoically beautiful!

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 04/15/24 03:59 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)