Well Jack I did perceive this as a rock type song however kept the format simple so as to enable it to be adapted to a lot of styles and genres in order to get the message out. This was one of the few strong message songs I have written and I did not want it pigeonholed. I like what you have done so far and agree with mark that the "middle bit" should be tackled from a different direction. Eerie or sad sounds good there are lots of "sad chords" I would possibly use and synth sounds good.