I like the melody but usually prefer a little more upbeat quicker tempo but seeing as this is a kind of downer lyric it prolly fits fine. I put a few notes nothing much but maybe some places to think about...don't change if what you have feels right to you. Good Luck

Originally Posted by Ricki E. Bellos
Hi JPF'rs,

As someone here suggested, I need the full meal deal with critiques. I can take it, go ahead, use and abuse me! As always, production notes will be saved for later if I ever re-do this one for good. It's lyrics and melody I care about the most. Let me have it!

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7582480

REASON
© Ricki E. Bellos

He left for the Bitterroots in the spring
He headed west saying west's the best...seems to be one to many wests
Since he didn't take everything
I waited for his call all summer and fall
Waiting's not what I would choose
Sometimes you win but mostly you lose...IDK...would like to think you could win just as much as lose...wouldn't you use I ? Sometimes I win and sometimes I lose

I need a reason to forgive
All the lies he told and the loss of my soul
I need a reason to forgive

Crazy Woman Creek runs through my yard...Nice
Don't know her real name but we're one and the same
Twisting and turning, not going far...most rivers go pretty far
Afraid to let go of what we know
But living in fear...what fear?...
Is what brought me here...brought you where?Seems like trying to rhyme

I need a reason to forget
All the sweet things he said to me
I need a reason to forget

Winter came down with a howling blow...IDK...maybe ..Winter came down like a howling soul
Still no boot prints in the snow...Nice
So I pour more wine to pass the time
But drinking doesn't ease the pain
It just brings it back again

I need a reason to believe
That love is real and I will heal
I need a reason to believe

I need a reason
I need one good reason
I need a reason
I need any reason at all


Last edited by tbryson; 05/22/09 10:58 PM.