Jan & Greg,

This is a very nice read! Great setting and a good story with lots of wisdom.

My favourite lines:

Forever dries a lot of tears
Look far beyond the clouds and share that pain
Learn to dance in the rain

Life gets all tangled up in little things
But stumbling doesnt mean you fallits an awakening

With his shirt he softly wiped her face
Theyd heard everything wed had to say

Only nit is the two verses and a lift/pre before the chorus. Can be a hard sell these days, as you also often need an instrumental hook in the intro, and the a&r guys are less than patient. But it's a hard bargain to trade meaning for commercial viability, right?

Great work!