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Is it possible to *un*post a lyric??? Man oh man..... well, back to the replies.

Bob-- "Good ideas described with clunky words"? Well, probably. But I tell ya what, though-- I just sung this to myself, and except for a couple of hitches where I need to drop a syllable, it sang okay! You'll hafta trust me on that one.

Now about the importance of singability,

I love youuuuu
You love me toooo
But why do you leave meeee
so sad and bluuuuue

is pretty gosh-darn singable. So singability is only part of the equation. I'm sure you'd agree with that anyway. But as dumb as the following statement may seem, I don't really write lyrics to be sung along with. I just write 'em to be listened to. As long as the singer can sing the lines without tripping over himself or under-enuciating, I can abide a little clunkiness here and there.

There's two songs I've been listening to in recent days that I challenge *any*one to sing-- "Cobwebs" by Loudon Wainwright III and "'Long Come A Viper" by Dan Hicks and His Hot Licks. But damn, are they good songs. So music is a big part of it, I think. But the fact that Loudon and Dan are somewhat obscure might've undermined my whole point, I dunno. My bottom line is, I can *sing* this g**d*** lyric! (But does it need tweaking? Um, yes. )

couch-- I'll only say this: it's ironic that you, who has gotten "this is more like a poem" in response to his lyrics 10 times more than anyone else here, should say that this doesn't resemble a lyric. But thanks for clarifying your earlier review, as well as your kind comments ("it's in lyric form"-- if that's not a compliment, I don't know what is) on my other lyric.

Sharon-- See above. I can sing this myself, but yeah, it does need tweaking. Thanks for stopping by.

Graham-- Your critique reminds me of the old one-liner, "The food is so terrible here. And such small portions!" So you're saying you hate this lyric, but that I should've included every letter of the alphabet? Oooohkay. I'll tell ya somethin', Graham-- I will never never EVER figure you out as long as I live. IMO, this lyric, singable or not, is more interesting and clever than any racy lyric I've ever read of yours. If you think this one is crap, then I don't know why you don't think the same of yours. But thank you as always (honest!) for stopping in.

And lastly, Bill-- I do think I write serious lyrics better than I do lighter ones. I've got more practice with serious ones. And at least you like my bad serious lyrics more than I do. All I can tell you is what I already told Bob and Sharon-- I can sing this one. Yeah, it's not the easiest lyric to sing, but I'd rather use the perfect word that's a little tough to sing than an imperfect one that's easy to sing. Maybe that's just me. Anyway, thanks for the visit.

WHEW!!! I'm done. This was a reply of Curtis-Cameronian proportions!

Anthony