LOL Anthony.
I came in to see how this was progressing and just read your last comment.
Love it when one opinion can convince someone their job is done.
You don't really want your critics to be silent do you?
After all. If my memory serves me right, every one of your lyrics that made it to music has the footprints of said critics and composer's licience all over it.
That is what we critique for. To make our stuff as good as we can get it.
Welcome to the forum Tari.
I hope you can get this swinging.
Will be surprised if it will be one of my favourite songs ever but live and learn always applies and the instrumental version could be good.
Regards.
Graham



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