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Hey Brecky,

See, you're getting feedback!

Let's see if I can think of anything to add....

Couple of thoughts...On my song with Steve Biederman, the hook "Walking Wounded" wasn't mentioned once (while using ABAB format for the verses). How do you like them apples?

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In my most recent venture, "Garden of Little White Lies", I do use the hook at the end of each verse, with an ABCB format:

“Garden of Little White Lies” – REVISED 7/30
© 2008 Lyrics Beth Williams

Timing was never their strong suit
So they just kept their eyes on the prize
And planted fake smiles on their faces
In their garden of little white lies

Day after day though, they hungered
For each other, and no more goodbyes
Relied on their dreams to sustain them
In their garden of little white lies

Pre-Chorus:
But twisting the truth can cause judgment to fade
And secrets get slippery when no one’s afraid

Chorus:
Those little white lies
Grew up 'round their thighs
As they played in the shade of their garden
But plant a black seed
It blooms twisted and bleeds
A minefield with no room to bargain

Harvest time came without warning
With haste, a gate left open wide
Then all came to stare at the two unaware
In their garden of little white lies

Chorus repeat

Bridge:
Their love and their fate had been one and the same
Until they made up their own rules to the game

Chorus


As a rule though, I do find myself "stuck" in the VVCVBC layout...and would be interested in pursuing some more loosey-goosey formats.

Thanks for bringing up this topic, Kristi. Very interesting....

Cheers,
Beth