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Hi Karen

Thanks for taking the time and offering some solid suggestions.

I like the removal of "like" on the second verse....reads nicer for sure.
I wouldn't change "Waiting on someday" for "I wait on someday"
Doesn't sing/sound anywhere near as nicely to me...
In the chorus everyone loves the descending singing on the word "be-li-e- eve" to add the word "Really" would kill that totally.
I'd never do that for a grammar thing

It was crazy, I had three songwriters in here with me one night while doing the vocals ( various age ranges 19 -22 - 40) and I bounced every single thing off them to come to this conclusion.

We were like, "that reads better, but that sings better, that is much catchier than that"
Oh but you wouldn't say it like that" Doesn't that pause feel funny"? etc... lol
I originally had the last chorus line doubled and then opted to shorten it.
It's nuts I ran it past 4 people as well... I rely mainly on a non songwriter friend/producer when I do this. That really helps.

Many of my rhythms/phrasings stem from much much older pop & R&B pop style songs. There's in many cases a school from which these things come from...
If you are familiar with lots of songs from acts like The Spinners, Harold Melvin Blue Notes, The Stylistics, etc.. this vibe would feel even more comfortable. Sometimes it's LA/Babyface
or Michael or Stevie whatever.. Mix that with the massive rock and other influences and forget about it lol

Thanks so much I so appreciate your input on it, wish I had it earlier too

Mike