--3---5----6/5----5-----3------2/1
all - day - long - he - lurks - there

----2/1----3----1------1
Staring - at - the - screen

1-----3-5-5-----3-----5------6------5------3
A - predator - on - the - world - wide - web

-2----1----3---2---1--2
well you know what I mean

-5-----6---5---6----6----5---3
His - spe-cial-ty - is - grooming

-3---------5-----6--5-----6----5-----5------3
Though - he - sel-dom - wash-es - his - face

5----6---------5----6----6----5-------3-----2/1
He - grooms - the - pret-ty - girls - and - boys

5-------6-----5-----6------6-----7/6/5
And - tries - to - leave - no - trace.

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Chorus
He's an internet spider
On the World Wide Web.
Come into my parlour
It's time that I was fed.
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Part 3:

We have been building so far to the chorus, so we should expect a payoff in it. The way I built it so far vocally I would be holding back in volume and if the voice allowed maybe give it a somewhat menacing quality. My voice does not have a very menacing quality to it, but Jim could pull it off easier. He seems to use a natural growl in his voice that would be more effective at this. Once we hit the chorus it should probably be with full voice and swagger.

The last line:

5-------6-----5-----6------6-----7/6/5
And - tries - to - leave - no - trace.

ends on the 7 stepping down to 5. The 7 makes it obvious that we are at the fifth. I don't mean to be confusing here, but when I say the 7 implies the fifth, I mean if you listen to the notes out loud you would probably seek a fifth chord to accompany the melody at that point.

Early on I said this scheme would work for a song in either a major or minor key. I played with a guitar to get a feel for it for the chorus, and I must backpedal a little to state this is really in a major key. It would definitely require tweaking to make this fit in a minor key. It could be done, but what I set out so far fits nicely in a major key without any tweaks. What I am hearing, though definitely has a minor second playing a significant role in setting the tone.

Now I would like to change the words in the chorus a little because it jumps from third person to first person half the way through, plus it now embues the singer with the stigma of being the bad guy. If the intent is to be the bad guy, then it would have been much more effective to start off like that. Then the menace would have been even more pronounced.

I want to use an interval leap here in the chorus. When I want to come up with something interesting I usually try with guitar in hand and explore different intervals until I have one that makes me feel like the chorus stands out, but still makes sense. I chose to go to a higher octave because it seemed like a less common interval to use, so I went for it. Play with the sounds and see if you hear a chord pattern behind it. I definitely have a rough idea behind it that should be fine tuned.

-3-----5----9---8---8----3---2/1-- ..........(Note: 8 and 9 denote the 1 and the 2 in the higher octave)
He's - an - in-ter-net - spi-der

-2----1-----3--------2----1---
On - the - World - Wide - Web.

-3---5-----9/8-- 8---3---2/1
Wel-come - to - his- par-lour

1----2--1-----3------2/1---1
A - spi-der - must - be - fed.


Okay, so I have put a preliminary melody to the verse and chorus (so rinse and repeat). Although there isn't one here I think I would work out a bridge where you could have some words fit to some scary sounds like "he's gonna find you, he knows just where you live..." It could be spoken or sung. A creepy voice speaking the words could be very effective. It should be about four lines long.

I would also change the key at some point, either coming out of the bridge, or before going into the last verse. A key change isn't necessary but it would be easy enough to go up one step to finish the song.

Questions?

Jack
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