Hi Stan,

So the "wooden face" didn't bother you? If V2 is too cryptic for ya, don't look at what I'm experimenting with! LOL grin Well, like I told Calvin, I'm glad you think it works for the most part in my original post. I never know when to quit, so I'm tweaking it in the hopes it takes it up a notch... (?)

I'm glad the spirit of the narrator comes across like you mentioned. That's important. And your outline is helpful to know where the strong and weak parts of the lyric are!

Thank you for that! smile

Kristi

A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist