Hi Kaley,

First, I would like to thank you for listening and giving your thoughtful feedback.

I had stated in a previous response concerning the use of the word than in "Than swimming deep into your depths...". Maybe the line should not have been capitalized since it is not a separate line but the continuation of a thought process which happens to break at the spot where it appears to be grammatically incorrect to start a line with the word "Than". I never picked up on it since it is actually a one line thought.

The line you used as a suggestion is a good line and would work.

As far as the wording goes, I chose the words to convey the message of heat without being too repetitive, using slight variations as to not be stale.

Thanks again Kaley,

Danny

I don't want to sound obstinant or insolent. The wording was thought out before using it.

The heart has its reasons, of which reason knows nothing of." —Blaise Pascal, 1670