Originally Posted by Deej56
Roy,

This has a nice sound to it, good contemporary melody to it—a lot of good to work with here. Generally, in reading the comments, I tend to agree with Vic’s feedback in a lot of respects.—I particularly like the idea of changing “Gone is the Wonderland” to 
“Looking for the Wonderland”—and it’s most probably a reference I’m unfamiliar with, but not sure what to make of “win myself a gong”. But regardless, there are some beautiful lines here—love, simply love, the last two lines of that bridge. Not sure if you consider this a finished work. It’s solid as it stands; but if you are up for tinkering, just my two cents to consider.

Wishing you the best,

Deej

Hi Deej, thanks for stopping by and for putting your thoughts into words.

I have always been open to respecting everyone's POV and yours is as valid as everyone else's.

Thanks for the nice comments and we are pleased that you liked the song...

The original wonderland that he dreamt of a a child, has gone, because he has changed direction. My wonderland as a child was to join the circus, but that has definitely gone..
His new wonderland would be to become a successful songwriter and to win a gong.

His aspirations are not to look for a wonderland any more, but to write good songs, so looking for a wonderland, would be out of place given the context of the song/story.

Another song maybe yes...

A Gong in the UK has many meanings, but one is that it's used (It's maybe a borderline slang word) is to describe any award given for achievement. Its bit by bit becoming more universally used.
If I told someone that I might win an Oscar , I would be considered conceited lol even above my station, but if I said I might win a gong, that encompasses all awards, from small to large. does that make sense...

here are just a few examples of It's usage.

https://www.musicweek.com/talent/re...americana-awards-winners-revealed/075169

https://www.mirror.co.uk/3am/celebrity-news/american-music-awards-honours-xxxtentacion-13392898

https://www.dailymotion.com/video/x101onj

https://www.celebsnow.co.uk/latest-...or-gong-at-mtv-video-music-awards-236024

https://www.thecourier.com.au/story/5781863/5sos-open-arias-and-win-first-gong/

I do consider it as finished Deej mainly because IMO it says exactly what I wanted it to say and for me in a good way.

I do really appreciate for stopping by

God Bless to all

Roy

Last edited by Roy Cooper; 08/15/19 12:59 PM.
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