Hi Tom and Moker,

wOW, I can here great things in here. I love the lyric and Moker your music is beautiful.

The contour of the melody is something I'd look at. It stays in the same area in the verses and chorus. Moker, I know you're keeping the melody in your voices "sweet spot", but try the first verse down a third or so down more...just to see if that works...still loving your voices "texture", very pleasing...no phrasing issues here, to my ears...

Nice work guys smile

Mike


Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)