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TV Drama
by Raymond Byabazaire - 08/31/26 09:46 AM
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Really solid song guys. I think this has real potential.
My only nits are that some of the vocal phrases seem slightly awkward.
I really suggest eliminating the word 'stay' in the chorus and making the line just: TOGETHER... FOR THE BETTER OR THE WORSE. If you do this the phrasing is improved and 'together' and 'better' become an obvious internal rhyme.
Great job,
Peace,
Ian
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