Originally Posted by Dannyk1
Hi Mike and thanks taking your time to give such an insightful critique of this song.

I'm no wizard or anything when it comes to song structure and don't know much about the whens and wheres concerning "pre-choruses" and the like. Most of my lyrical experience involves the standard verse chorus verse chorus bridge chorus structure. I have written some ballads and a few with tags at the end, but that is abut the extent of my knowledge when it comes to structure. I didn't write the whole lyric but did have a big part in it. The melody, vocals, chording, and composition is all Tammy.

I'm kind of surprized that you would point out the line "There's never been a love like you for me" as struggling the most. It is one that I think is very effective. Live and learn!

Thank you for your help. If we can get the people involved to give it another go, maybe some touch ups will be in order.

Thanks again,

Danny


Hi Danny

You are welcome and thanks! smile

No actually I meant that line was struggling phrase wise, melodically. It sounded & felt awkward not the lyric aspect.
Especially since all the attention song wise is landing on it and being geared towards it. That's a payoff line. It has to be very smooth and rewarding, easy feeling and natural.

I think Tammy does a wonderful job on this aspect of things overall. She is a NATURAL at it for sure... Part of the process or we can call it the game or the craft is the combining of your natural abilities with your inspiration then on top of that your creativity. Then comes the WORK part.
I let my natural abilities and instincts come in and play around first. Then I challenge them!!

Fortunately not every one faces that dilemma or has to face it.
Some write to write, and do to do. It's much healthier that way and more productive as well. The only way to improve and grow is too keep doing, BUT when you keep doing, songs can be similar. Similar things or if not pushing harder in some way or direction then the growing slows down... Tams I'm just talking in general not specifically to you.
Its more for everyone, post a new song about every other day and see if anyone notices a vast improvement or change. It's just like dieting... See somebody after six months of NOT seeing them and EVERYBODY notices... smile

This song is tricky as it starts with the title so therefore kinda starts with the chorus in a way. It has good changes in all regards but only a knock out punch stops it from being more effective or hit material.

I believe all you guys have this potential that is why I'm bothering you's LOL

All the best
Mike


Thanks!
Peace Mike
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