So here's a tune that I am glad I didn't comment on right away. At first I thought that I was having trouble hearing through the quality of the demo recording, but now on my 4th listen, I am thinking "What was I thinking?" (LOL).

Everyone has mention the "rushed feeling" of it, but I think this is just that the singing needs some practice, the tempo sounds pretty good to me.

I like how the stones concept was continued from verse 1 to verse 2 -- but it was dropped in verse 3. Maybe transform that stone into a mountain in verse 3.

I am not convinced that the "flying" and "shooting star" concept fits totally in. Just a thought.

Good collab, best of luck with it.

Kevin



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