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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Joined: Dec 2000
Posts: 8,240 Likes: 6
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I was being sincere, my motive was only to give an honest, helpful critique. There needs to be a hint, a small one earlier in the lyric about the son's mindset to murder his own father. Songs aren't novels and it's legitimate to leave certain details to the listener's imagination. But that's too big to be the responsibility of the audience. That's where being a writer comes in. You have to be aware of what your project needs to reach its potential, then you have to buckle down and do it. It's hard.
The ending of this comes out of nowhere and is a deus ex machina. I'm not trying to be combative.
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