Hi Wy,

I of course love your title because I am already seeing the first rhyme.

I'd rather see a shorter bridge and a more defined departure lyrically by not mentioning words used in the rest of the lyric.

Perhaps:

I don't mind the sacrifice
Of money for more time,
To spend with you there darlin',
That suits my heart just fine!

Best,
Lynn
P.S. Keep the "shirkin" it's workin' for me!!

Last edited by Lynn Orloff; 10/06/07 05:54 PM.

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