To Glynda
JPF Mp3 Boards

Glynda,

Thanks for considering us and submitting your song.
While the vocal here was terrific,very heartfelt and passionate
I'm sorry to say this is not a hit song.

The lyric is well written and has the potential but the music,the song itself, is where the trouble really lies.
There are some nice melody lines and phrases here and there and again the singer really delivers. However it never puts two of them together anywhere, it simply lacks hooks.
I can truly appreciate that it has lots of changes chord wise and melodically but that is also part of the reason it's not sticking and I can't keep the song in my head.

For example this line"
Lost myself somewhere along the way

This was the first really flowing catchy melody, and it fit the lyric the smoothest, more so that the "marriage" line.
Now the line after it:
It's time I toughened up and moved on

Would have benefited much more having been similar to the previous line. In other words your best hook is used so little in the song, Why?

Then again later the singer does a beautiful kinda lift on the
"Step To The Side" line, in the resolving part, then I don't recall ever hearing it again.
The song feels a bit too long and this is due to too many phrase changes and melody changes. It simply does not carry itself so it loses the listener.

I appreciate the work done hear and think you have enough going on to keep punching away and really hit home with one.

All the best,keep at this.

Mr. Mike Knowitall
Sublevel Music NYC

Thanks!
Peace Mike
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